I had fun with the sonnet, so I thought I’d try again. This time I have to write 107 words including:
….I’m exhausted. Shut the door behind you….
Here goes….
He’s making for the door. I don’t blame him, but I was looking forward to this evening so much.
Work was a nightmare today. Then I had to dump everything and rush to collect the kids and Tom had broken his finger so I dragged them all to the hospital, then home for homework and food and stopping them from fighting and they wouldn’t go to bed and I nagged and threatened.
I prepared the meal in a hurry. We ate in silence. I was tired.
And now I can’t keep my eyes open. I’m exhausted. “Shut the door behind you,” I mumble. I think it banged.
Miriam Drori, Author 
19 replies on “100 Word Challenge – Week #39”
Another piece where I can almost feel that I am in the room. Has a nice, realistic feel to it.
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Thank you 🙂
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What an unpleasant day – chasing around everyone, then a silent tension filled meal and then bed, exhausted, and then to have the characters partner passively aggressively slam the door shut. Nice piece.
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fits well with my first take on this prompt…completely realistic as well. hopefully, she rests deeply…
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What a truly awful day – hope she has a better one tomorrow.
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Gosh, day’s like that are awful. Been there done that! You have caught the tone perfectly.
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I love that last line – what a story that tells! There are so many who will associate with the sentiments here. Excellent writing!
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Thanks all 🙂
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The sun will come out tomorrow, so hopefully the main character in this story will be well rested enough to greet the day with open arms after such a patience-testing evening.
Cheers!
~Nicole
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Like how you uniquely split the prompt so that it said both her thoughts and words. Fine writing.
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Oh heck, been there. Agree with ventahl, splitting the prompt was inspired. Lovely piece.
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Nice piece, I could feel the overwhelming exhaustion of the MC. Well done.
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Was very sympathetic to the main character from the beginning, great momentum building to the end. Last line cinched it!
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The thought of taking all the kids to the hospital, and then still having to go home and do the evening routines makes me shudder. Well done.
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Thank you. 🙂
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Well written and realistic piece. What a day !
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A great story.
The door shutting with a ‘bang’ spoke volumes.
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I suppose that’s the key to writing flash fiction – a few words that speak volumes.
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It’s great to receive so many comments. Thank you, everyone 🙂
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