I had fun with the sonnet, so I thought I’d try again. This time I have to write 107 words including:
….I’m exhausted. Shut the door behind you….
Here goes….
He’s making for the door. I don’t blame him, but I was looking forward to this evening so much.
Work was a nightmare today. Then I had to dump everything and rush to collect the kids and Tom had broken his finger so I dragged them all to the hospital, then home for homework and food and stopping them from fighting and they wouldn’t go to bed and I nagged and threatened.
I prepared the meal in a hurry. We ate in silence. I was tired.
And now I can’t keep my eyes open. I’m exhausted. “Shut the door behind you,” I mumble. I think it banged.
Miriam Drori, Author 
19 replies on “100 Word Challenge – Week #39”
Another piece where I can almost feel that I am in the room. Has a nice, realistic feel to it.
Thank you 🙂
What an unpleasant day – chasing around everyone, then a silent tension filled meal and then bed, exhausted, and then to have the characters partner passively aggressively slam the door shut. Nice piece.
fits well with my first take on this prompt…completely realistic as well. hopefully, she rests deeply…
What a truly awful day – hope she has a better one tomorrow.
Gosh, day’s like that are awful. Been there done that! You have caught the tone perfectly.
I love that last line – what a story that tells! There are so many who will associate with the sentiments here. Excellent writing!
Thanks all 🙂
The sun will come out tomorrow, so hopefully the main character in this story will be well rested enough to greet the day with open arms after such a patience-testing evening.
Cheers!
~Nicole
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Like how you uniquely split the prompt so that it said both her thoughts and words. Fine writing.
Oh heck, been there. Agree with ventahl, splitting the prompt was inspired. Lovely piece.
Nice piece, I could feel the overwhelming exhaustion of the MC. Well done.
Was very sympathetic to the main character from the beginning, great momentum building to the end. Last line cinched it!
The thought of taking all the kids to the hospital, and then still having to go home and do the evening routines makes me shudder. Well done.
Thank you. 🙂
Well written and realistic piece. What a day !
A great story.
The door shutting with a ‘bang’ spoke volumes.
I suppose that’s the key to writing flash fiction – a few words that speak volumes.
It’s great to receive so many comments. Thank you, everyone 🙂