FLASH MOB 2013 is a hybrid blog carnival and competition celebrating International Flash Fiction Day, which is on 22nd June.

The organisers are looking for stories that take risks and experiment.

The competition is free and the details are at FLASH MOB 2013.

My attempt is definitely experimental for me:

The View from Heaven

They stood, she and he, embracing in the centre of a perfect garden. Flowers all around. Pinks, reds, yellows, purples, whites. Water cascading down the rocks into the pool. Maturing plums and kumquats nested by sun-frolicked green leaves. Sweet, juicy fruit waiting to be gathered and consumed.

Over there, on the same level, stood a large bald prism. One triangular end thrust out through needle-sharp pine leaves. Acute angles pointed and menaced. Inside the prism, as clear as if its walls had been transparent and its position much closer, people wandered in a daze, struggling to grasp the horrifying enormity exhaled by tragic reminders.

“It looks quite near,” she said. “Could we walk there, down into the valley and up the other side?”

“Do you want to?” he replied in question.

“How long would it take?”

“Oh, about seventy years, going backwards.”

She glanced at him with a frowning half-smile. “We’d die before we got there.”

“Just as well,” he said, without smiling.

By Miriam Drori

Author, editor, attempter of this thing called life. Social anxiety warrior. Cultivating a Fuji, edition 3, a poignant, humorous and uplifting tale, published with Ocelot Press, January 2023.

14 replies on “FLASH MOB 2013”

I thought they were quite comfortable with each other until the last line and his lack of a smile made me think he wouldn’t want to live it all over again with her. I see that there are a few ways of interpreting this, but that was my take. 🙂

That’s fine, and I won’t say what I intended because it’s meant to be interpreted as you see it. I’m sure you know much more about writing flash fiction than I do. I wrote it by first writing the story and then replacing the identifying details with more general words.

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